I’m a business administration student. I found there are several reasons why Mr. Williams’ business failed. First of all, the store’s location was inappropriate because it was located near a shopping center which has two large music stores. Second, the music styles that Mr. Williams bought were monotonous. Hip-hop and rock, however, people who may present themselves for buying CDs is middle-aged people. The middle-aged may refuse to buy hip-hop and rock style CDs. Furthermore, the wages for Mr. Williams’ employees was too high. Therefore, Mr. Williams would lose money before earn money. Last but not the least, the shop hours are too short. He carried on business on the wrong time and opened his store too little time so that he would lose a great deal of customers. To sum up, Mr. Williams’ failure on business is reasonable and we can use this case as a warning.
Hip-hop and rock, however, people who may present themselves for buying CDs is middle-aged people
回覆刪除感覺怪怪的 hip-hop 應該是主詞,可是後面好像沒有給他接的動詞
is middle-aged people 這邊是are 吧 前面是people
we can use this case as a warning.
感覺lesson比較好 警告有點怪怪的
hip-hop那句可能要改一下
回覆刪除people算複數喔
同上
回覆刪除結論句喜歡
Hip-hop and rock, however, people who may present themselves for buying CDs is middle-aged people
回覆刪除這一句這樣不行喔
OK!!